Opowiadanie na angielski

[Mega Filip OP]

Może ktoś checknąć? Już nie mam siły tego czytać, wszystko mi sie juz pomieszało ;)

Finally it is! The 24th of December! I've been waiting whole year for that. I couldn't wait for evening... My mom asked me to make a good climate in the house. At first I brought a pine tree to home. I'm not keen on decorating, so my mom worked on it. In the meantime I hung some mistletoes and turned on carols. Day passed in the blink of an eye.
Nine o'clock has struck. Suddenly, I heard knocking. My heart started to beat faster. I opened the door and I saw him. Big, fat, white-beared man wearing red coat and carrying huge bag of presents. I invited him to my bedroom. He sat on my bed. I apologised, left him alone and went for my baseball bat. When I came back to my guest I noticed that he was looking out the window. I knew it's the moment. I took a swing and hit his head. He fell on the floor dropping his bag. I gagged him and threw the body to cellar. I came back to bag and did a review of all gifts. They all were mine. Much time passed, I lost track of time. The pleasure was interrupted by doorbell. Who could it be? I was a little scared. I opened the door and saw Santa's good, old friend, snowman being Jack Frost. He seemed angry. And certainly he was. He pushed me on wall and . I was afraidd as hell and told him the whole truth. He noticed all the presents and got angry even more. I felt penetrating frost. He turned me into an ice cube. I only saw him running out of home...
I woke up next day. I saw my brother playing with his new toys, mom wearing her new clothes, and dad tasting his new whiskey. Where are my gifts? I checked floor under christmas tree. Oh, there were they. Some branches and coal... Anyway, it was the most crazy Christmas ever!

1. Czy "cellar" to faktycznie jest piwnica?
2. Może mi ktoś podrzucić słowko do "coal"? Kompletnie mi wylecialo z glowy. Cos w stylu "pack", "pocket", "plenty" (z tym ze to ostatnie oznacza bardziej "mnostwo", a tutaj raczej powinno byc "troche").
3. Czy "be pissed off" jest wulgarne, czy raczej mozna uzywac w - przykladowo - rozmowie z osobą starszą?

[Waarks]

Finally it is! The 24th of December! I've been waiting whole year for that day. I couldn't wait for the evening... My mom asked me to make a good climate in the house. At first I brought a pine tree to home. I'm not keen on decorating, so my mom worked on it. In the meantime I hung some mistletoes and turned on carols. Day passed in the blink of an eye.
Nine o'clock has struck. Suddenly, I heard knocking. My heart started to beat faster. I opened the door and I saw him. Big, fat, white-bearded man wearing red coat and carrying huge bag of presents. I invited him to my bedroom. He sat on my bed. I apologised, left him alone and went for my baseball bat. When I came back to my guest I noticed that he was looking out the window. I knew it's the moment. I took a swing and hit his head. He fell on the floor dropping his bag. I gagged him and threw the body to the cellar. I came back to the bag and did a review of all gifts. They were all mine. Much time passed, I lost track of time. The pleasure was interrupted by a doorbell. Who could it be? I was a little scared. I opened the door and saw Santa's good, old friend, a snowman being - Jack Frost. He seemed angry. And he certainly was. He pushed me to the wall. I was afraidd as hell and told him the whole truth. He noticed all the presents and got angrier even more. I felt penetrating frost. He turned me into an ice cube. I only saw him running out of home...
I woke up next day. I saw my brother playing with his new toys, mom wearing her new clothes, and dad tasting his new whiskey. Where are my gifts? I checked floor under christmas tree. Oh, there were they. Some branches and coal... Anyway, that was the craziest Christmas ever!

wegiel moze byc

3. Czy "be pissed off" jest wulgarne, czy raczej mozna uzywac w - przykladowo - rozmowie z osobą starszą?

ja bym raczej nie uzywal, lepiej cos w stylu irritated

[Euronymous]

No i wywal ostatnie zdanie, bo wklepane jest na siłę. Fajniej będzie wyglądać bez niego.

[Mega Filip OP]

Ostatnie zdanie musi być.
"Napisz opowiadanie, które kończy sie zdaniem:". -z tym, ze zapomniałem jakie to ma być dokładnie zdanie, to jest taka wersja robocza
Dzieki za pomoc, z tego co widzę chyba nie jest najgorzej z moim angielskim. Napisałem to z braku czegokolwiek do roboty, a wyglądało to tak, ze co chwilę cofałem sie 2 zdania do tylu, zmieniałem coś, a potem nie sprawdzałem całości, no i wyszły takie beznadziejne błędy w postaci złych kolejności wyrazów... Wrzuciłem tutaj głównie z powodu "the" i "a" i jak widać słusznie postapiłem ;)
Zielone bagi lecą.