Potrzebuje kogoś dobrego z angielskiego

Mógłby ktoś sprawdzić czy to jest dobrze zrobione?
Zależy mi na tym żeby dostać piątkę, proszę o poprawe ewentualnych bledów
Jutro oddaje to o 7 rano

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Dear Pat
I've got to tell you about someone I've met recently.

Her name is Isabelle, I've met her at the party three days ago,
First of all, we had been standing next to ourselfs in a queque
and we ordered the same drinks - beer with lemonade,
And later we have discovered that we have common friend - Mark.
Friendship with mark isn't the only thing we have in common,
She's also keen on playing tennis, and guess what, she also loves films with Robert de Niro!
As Me and You!
What a suprise! I'm seeing her next saturday, we are going to watch a new
movie with our favorite actor in a theater near me.
She's such a wonderful person, Isa is tall, very beautiful, and she has brown hair.
I'm sure you will like her! During holidays, when you come We can go
to the lakes of Mazury with my uncle, he has his own boat!
What a great time we are going to have!

Looking forward to hearing from you soon!
Best,
XYZ

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- Nie opisałeś pierwszego wrażenia
- Nie opisałeś cech charakteru

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with my uncle, he has his own boat!

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Zmieniłbym to na

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on my uncle's boat

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sugerując co moglibyście robić we trójkę, a nie w czwórkę pewnie nikt się nie przyczepi ale moja anglistka mnie goniła za takie szczegóły

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Dear PatI've got to tell you about someone I've met recently.Her name is Isabelle. I've met her at the party three days ago.First of all, we were standing next to each other in a queue.I was surprised a little bit, because she ordered the same drink - beer with lemonade. Later that night we discovered that we have common friend - Mark. But it's not the only thing we have in common.She's also keen on playing tennis, and guess what, she also loves films with Robert de Niro!As Me and You!What a surprise! I'm seeing her next saturday, we are going to watch a newmovie with our favorite actor in a theater near me.She's such a wonderful person. Isa is tall, very beautiful and she has brown hair.I'm sure you will like her! During holidays, while you'll be visiting Poland, we could go to the lakes of Mazury with my uncle, he has his own boat!What a great time we could have!Looking forward to hearing from you soon!Best, XY

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Jest późna godzina, oczy mi się same zamykają, więc nie gwarantuję, że będzie lepiej, ale poprawiłem kilka błędów i zaproponowałem trochę inaczej niektóre zdania. Brakuje mi też dokładniejszego opisu Twojego pierwszego wrażenia - powiedziane jest tylko, że zaskoczyła Cię zamawiając tego samego drinka, trochę za mało. Brakuje też opisu charakteru, zamiast tego opisałeś jej wygląd.

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Hyakinthos napisał

sugerując co moglibyście robić we trójkę, a nie w czwórkę pewnie nikt się nie przyczepi ale moja anglistka mnie goniła za takie szczegóły

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Dokładnie, sam to przeoczyłem. Brak wzmianki o tym, że robilibyście to z tą nowo poznaną laską.

1.Blędy w pisowni.
2.Brak wielkich liter.
3.Zle czasy.
4.Zle rodzajniki.

Nie chce mi sie zaznaczac gdzie dokladnie, skoro juz oddales.

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Dear Pat
I've got to tell you about someone I've met recently.

Her name is Isabelle, I've met her at the party three days ago, "a party", gość z którym rozmawiasz nie ma pojęcia o jakim przyjęciu mówisz dlatego używasz indefinite article
First of all, we had been standing next to ourselfs in a queque Zmieniłbym "first of all" na coś innego, przykładowo "at first", "we were standing next to each other in a queue", had been używasz w sytuacji gdy zaraz po tym występuje kolejna czynność w -ing.
and we ordered the same drinks - beer with lemonade,
And later we have discovered that we have common friend - Mark. dodałbym - "after a short conversation we discovered that we have a common friend - Mark"
Friendship with mark isn't the only thing we have in common,
She's also keen on playing tennis, and guess what, she also loves films with Robert de Niro!
As Me and You!
What a suprise! I'm seeing her next saturday, we are going to watch a new
movie with our favorite actor in a theater near me.
She's such a wonderful person, Isa is tall, very beautiful, and she has brown hair.
I'm sure you will like her! During holidays, when you come We can go "when you come" dodaj po tym gdzie, samo come nic nie znaczy. We, you niekoniecznie z dużej litery, piszesz do kumpla nie do prezydenta
to the lakes of Mazury with my uncle, he has his own boat! "we can visit the Masurian lake district with my uncle, he owns a boat."
What a great time we are going to have!

Looking forward to hearing from you soon!
Best,
XYZ

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Nie skumałem że już za późno xD No cóż to masz na przyszłość.